An extra flash 55: the notebook

[an excerpt from a short story I began today]

His eyes were the bluest blue, radiated by the water in them, either from age or sadness. Looking deeper, I saw what it must be like to be a father and a husband to these two women, carrying the enormous weight of death on his shoulders.

Yet in his eyes, I saw something like joy.

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6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. dayner
    Feb 23, 2010 @ 01:14:59

    Wow, I can’t wait to read the rest. Soon, I hope.

    I must tell you, when I looked into his eyes I saw an older George W Bush. Do you see the resemblance?

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  2. Natasha
    Feb 22, 2010 @ 20:30:26

    Oh, good start. Who is he? Who are the women? What’s with the enormous weight of death? And why the joy?

    I’ll be interested to read more…

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  3. darksculptures
    Feb 22, 2010 @ 15:01:36

    You grabbed me with this one. I can’t wait to see the short story. Nice hook! Is this something you are going to share with us? I sure hope so.

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    • kathanink
      Feb 23, 2010 @ 08:59:33

      I am hoping to keep working on it, but it’s an emotional story for me. I’m not even sure this is the hook, I think it’s in the middle or end of the story….not sure….

      Reply

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